Thursday, January 17, 2013

Allusion Poem



On a planet with blue circles and red liquid 

a war breaks out

coming from parents with great athletic ability 

i gain the advantage

with a strong heart 

strong legs

and strong body

as i step onto the battlefield

with a helmet 

and a spear

i travel into the battlefield 

hyped up with adrenaline 

i do not fear anything

my resilience 

family

my opponent fearless

a valiant warrior

I've met my match
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4 comments:

  1. taylor takahashiJanuary 22, 2013 at 10:27 AM

    your poem has a really good voice throughout the entire thing. However, i don't see how it alludes to you and it doesn't make a lot of sense.

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  2. k a i t l y n m .January 22, 2013 at 10:35 AM

    I like your sensory detail in your poem. However, even if i get a hint of what you are alluding to, I still don't completely understand without looking the details up.

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  3. azavalaJanuary 22, 2013 at 2:19 PM

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  4. azavalaJanuary 22, 2013 at 2:20 PM

    You need to show your allusion a bit more use his characteristics to describe how you feel inside. Also discuss ares' story a bit more so that we really know what you are alluding to. You have to use Ares' story to represent yourself and how you are that person. AS(1+)

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